Comments to Book Review.

Phoung:
you switched ideas, you first introduced her book then talked about the flaws of it. Only has one Contreat details. Show evidence from the book on paragraph four, so the reader would know what you are taking. about. You said you were confused because of the changing of the switching of events, and now on paragraph five you are talking about how it is less confusing. You are contradicting yourself. I like the way you found a flaw on the book about “[..] the author writes makes it confusing because the reader would then have to remind themselves that the character is switching from being awake in the coma to being awake in real life but no actually awake at the same time.”Good job on spotting the author’s weakness.
Shiyun:
There is not transition between paragraphs three and four, it went straight to your idea of the purpose of the book. “After finishing The Hunger Games, I thought that it was a very great book. It got very intense and exciting to read near the middle of the book. Its like you can not stop flipping the pages. This was really a great book, it taught me alot about how government runs when it takes control of the people. This book is intended to tell people about this kind of government system; warning the possibility that out government system might turn out this way.” this paragraph makes me want to read the book. Good job at telling how you felt while reading the book. The way you describe your book makes me want to read it too, good job at trying to convince the audience that the book is great for reading.
Wendy:
“There was something about the way Tablo wrote that made me and my cousin feel the need to continue turning the page when we read it. This might be because of the way he explained each situation or because the stories was like poetry in a more detailed form. It talked about solitude and pieces of youth, which left me with a bittersweet taste.” This is deep. It makes me feel i should read the book, and try to understand what the author is trying to say. Is the book only about sadness? You said that in the end it did not talk about Tablo’s life, but in the beginning it did, show evidence.